October 8th, 2005

Genre 2

I am

I am a shy child that stutters

I wonder how long it will last

I hear whispers and gigles from others 

I see others starring in anticipation as I stubble over my words

I want to learn how to speak more clearly

I am a shy child that stutters

 

I pretend I am alone when I speak 

I feel frustrated and embarrassed

I touch my mouth to stop the repetitions

I worry what others are thinking

I cry to God "Why Me?"

I am a shy child that stutters

 

I understand why others stare

I say its not my fault

I dream of speaking more clearly

I try to pretend I don't care

I hope I overcome this disorder

I am a shy child that stutters

Posted by JillJill at 05:33 AM | 2 comments
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sirk4
Comment posted on October 13th, 2005 at 09:42 AM
Voice: Client who stutters

Audience: General public

Say Back: The author is describing the thoughts of a shy child who stutters. The author talks about how the child is embarrassed and how others tease him for his stuttering. The boy wants to be able to talk without stuttering.

Bless: The line, "I pretend I am speaking in a mirror" was very good and creative. I think that is possibly something someone who stutters may try to do to overcome their dysfluent moments.

Address: You could include more information about the child's stuttering. You mentioned blocks at some point, but you may want to include even more information about how the child speaks. Also, most people won't know what blocks are, so you may want to describe the block.
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KimLucas
Comment posted on October 12th, 2005 at 12:27 PM
1. Voice: The poem is in the voice of the client who stutters.

2. Audience: The poem is written to the public to show how he is feeling.

3. Say Back: the poem is discussing how the child feels about his stuttering. He is very embarrassed and wishes he could control his stuttering.

4. Bless: I like the line that says: "I see others starring in anticipation" This is something that is often done when a stutter is having blocks and I don't think people realize they are doing it. I also like the line "I hear whispers and snickers" I just like the way it sounds.

5. Address: I was having trouble understanding the line "I touch mouth to stop" I think you left out "my." Another way you could say that is "I touch my mouth trying to overcome the stuttering moment" or just include what you are trying to stop in the way you worded it before.
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